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Thanks Toothy. I never get tired of praise.

2009-07-27T09:42:19.266+10:00

Thanks Toothy. I never get tired of praise.

Wow, I can't believe how you managed to influence ...

2009-07-27T05:05:28.110+10:00

Wow, I can't believe how you managed to influence the last two days of my life so much. I really hope you manage to publish your work because you deserve it. I mean, I've read stuff that's %^&$ compared to Fatal Cure and it got published...

Thanks Fiona, I'll get onto them. I can't edit on ...

2009-07-16T10:24:51.132+10:00

Thanks Fiona, I'll get onto them. I can't edit on their site unfortunately.

Hey Coops, this story was featured on the home pag...

2009-07-16T05:25:27.951+10:00

Hey Coops, this story was featured on the home page of Web Fiction Guide, and I just noticed there's a typo in the description "tenancy" instead of "tendency" - thought you might want to fix that...

Ah, I have closure, for now... (Couldn't resist) L...

2009-07-15T13:02:59.212+10:00

Ah, I have closure, for now... (Couldn't resist) Loved it Coops!

Moving on to the blobspot- http://www.facebook.com/l/;http://coopsthoughtcontrol.blogspot.com/

My subscription is set. Keep it coming. You will be paying the bills and then some if you continue on this fabulous journey. You are very talented and have incredible focus.

Bravo Coops, Bravo!

The 'cure' I envisaged is the Parasite's secretion...

2009-07-14T12:01:13.526+10:00

The 'cure' I envisaged is the Parasite's secretion. The elixir of life. The idea coming from GM paranoia. Genetically Engineered bugs were an extrapolation of this.

The 'fatal' part is to be the total loss of our real selves. Though our bodies live on, we are denied the benefits of that existence. This is something I wanted to explore further.

It's

I'm glad you're changing the title! It didn't make...

2009-07-14T11:16:52.958+10:00

I'm glad you're changing the title! It didn't make sense to me; what was the cure? Also, when I googled it I got the other book.

So, new title ideas? "The Creeps and the Crawlies"? "Better Off Dead"?
"Sam Has a Bad Day"? I know you'll think of something good!

I'm already having Sam Withdrawal. I loved getting...

2009-07-13T13:36:55.846+10:00

I'm already having Sam Withdrawal. I loved getting lost in his horrible, twisted, hilarious world. Good luck with your stories - I hope to read some soon.

Excellent job, I can't wait to read more.

2009-07-07T01:38:40.062+10:00

Excellent job, I can't wait to read more.

It's personal preference as to which term you use....

2009-07-05T10:14:27.176+10:00

It's personal preference as to which term you use. I drove trucks for a while and this is the way we described allowing the clutch to take up.

The post by 'heymary' was deleted after a heavy ed...

2009-07-04T18:35:39.608+10:00

The post by 'heymary' was deleted after a heavy edit reflecting her corrections made it obsolete. Thanks Mary.

Thank you Fiona and heymary for your ongoing suppo...

2009-07-04T15:03:09.951+10:00

Thank you Fiona and heymary for your ongoing support.

I've completed the edits and changed a few sentences that were unclear throughout the novel. The English language can get in its own way at times but I have tried to keep the flavour Australian and only changed parts that did not make sense.

I used the word 'dearth' meaning scarcity, on purpose. I also rewrote

"It seems only my objectionable presence is requir...

2009-07-03T23:39:58.256+10:00

"It seems only my objectionable presence is required to provoke bitter words and instant tears that glitter in dark-ringed eyes needs."
Doesn't sound right to me. It may be due to the difference of our nationalities. If it is correct it should read,
"It seems only my objectionable presence is required to provoke bitter words and instant tears that glitter in

You are an excellent writer. Well done, thanks for...

2009-07-03T11:31:36.074+10:00

You are an excellent writer. Well done, thanks for the amazing story.

I assume the "for now" means there's going to be a sequel...?

"A large water features mirror provides a sudden r...

2009-06-30T19:40:59.354+10:00

"A large water features mirror provides a sudden revelation" should read,
"A large water feature's mirror provides a sudden revelation"

"Thus secured I let in the clutch and punch the"
OK, so this is the second use of this term. A subtle difference in our speech. We say, "let the clutch out." Hopefully you have ignored my earlier

Thanks for the clarification. I think you're right...

2009-06-26T05:35:01.174+10:00

Thanks for the clarification. I think you're right about detention facilities for women or teen girls accomodating mothers with babies, maybe it would even have a nursery.
ugh, some grim possibilities there.

Holy shit it's a mess isn't it. Tense's, grammar, ...

2009-06-25T14:10:23.487+10:00

Holy shit it's a mess isn't it. Tense's, grammar, spelling. I almost wanted to set the computer on fire.

Thanks.

Thank you Mary. This exactly the sort of feedback ...

2009-06-25T13:30:51.226+10:00

Thank you Mary. This exactly the sort of feedback I need.

I get to a point where I've read it so many times the missing words are automatically filled in by my brain.

Good point. I had to search hard for the snippet I...

2009-06-25T13:11:24.614+10:00

Good point. I had to search hard for the snippet I'd tried to use to explain his descent into madness and selfishness. Found it in way back at Chapter 15.

Before he'd given up hope Sam wanted to impress the rescuers (he thought would come) with his forethought and preparedness. He'd gathered tonnes of gear and stockpiled it to look after any refugees he came across.
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My opinion's only... Hope they help Coop. Loving i...

2009-06-25T12:19:20.881+10:00

My opinion's only... Hope they help Coop. Loving it! ~M

"It supposed to happen in my nice, safe" should read,

"It is supposed to happen in my nice, safe"

"lapses in concentration might be to death of me" should read,

"lapses in concentration might be the death of me"

but why would Sam do that when he only cares about...

2009-06-25T11:37:42.712+10:00

but why would Sam do that when he only cares about himself?
he hasn't attempted to rescue anyone else

Sam has fully prepared the place as a last stand r...

2009-06-24T21:58:15.872+10:00

Sam has fully prepared the place as a last stand redoubt. It should contain every item a struggling civilization would need. Perhaps I need to enhance this preparedness in earlier chapters.

Thanks for the insight, I will take it on board.

PS: I have no children and learning about infantile habits has been fascinating.

another great chapter I'd been wondering how they...

2009-06-24T15:25:54.542+10:00

another great chapter

I'd been wondering how they'd keep the baby alive. Convenient there was baby formula in the stockpile.

Edit is done. Nothing that will ruin the story for...

2009-06-19T08:48:55.361+10:00

Edit is done. Nothing that will ruin the story for anyone who doesn't want to re-read it. Hopefully it explains his route better, and I threw in some visuals cos I can't help myself.

Thanks for bringing that to my attention, Fiona. H...

2009-06-19T07:41:02.677+10:00

Thanks for bringing that to my attention, Fiona. Having the reader think that wasn't unintentional. Obviously I need to edit the passage to make it clearer.

Obviously what I see happening has already played out numerous times in my head. Repetition causes me to skip proper explanations sometimes.